My new prey

• Artist: l-l a r d c o r eUnicorn
• Description: Hey, this is an introduction to a book im going to start writing pretty soon, i cant tell you anything more, because i dont want the idea taken!
  but i do write a lot, and i do do avi art, please comment i really like those and yea...
  
  ill end up writing more
  
  
  Is it ironic that i got turned into the most legendry american beast, but getting cut with a pencial?
  well, im not sure, but all i know is i have to survive for a while until ii can find that dumb drake carlos.....
• Date: 10/05/2008
• Tags: prey

Introductin

I peered over the leaning gargoyles head, at the small New Yorkers. I remembered what it was like to rome the side walks of the Big Apple. I sighed, remembering how if it wasn’t for that stupid Drake Carlos then I wouldn’t be up here hiding away, I peered once again at the people below me. I picked up a small stone and threw it across the way, it broke a window to another building 15 yards away from me. I looked back down. My old life was down there, my old lovers, my old friends, my old family. My new prey

Comments

[Yuffie07]

I like this. It's very good.

[megahead_monster]

wow thats soo....WOW

[LexOnFyr]

i like it, just check ur spelling. that's all i have to tell you! but i hope u do great on ur story. i know its hard, but fun to write on! I know this cuz i'm writing one as well!

[Melanie7307]

I like it alot, keep writing. Try and put a lil bit more detail in there, though. biggrin

[xx___Dai-Yoru]

I really liked it. It's pretty interesting, though I hope you start using more imagery as you go one.

No offense or anything, just a critic from one writer to another. I like getting critiqued, it really dose improve your writing....well as long as it isn't a straight up nasty and mean comment.

Well anyways yeah I liked it, and I hope that maybe you post more bits and pieces of your story.

Could you rate and comment mine?