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Intro:
As much as I wanted Joe to like me i wanted him to hate me to.
I spent my whole life wanting him to love me or at least like me a little bit. But guess what. He never did. He fell for Annabeth.
Annabeth had it all. Money, cars, money, smart. Everything a guy would want. She was pretty to. But honest she was not any bit nice.
I wanted him to hate me because I hate myself for trying.
Chapter1:
Lily wake up my brother screamed in my ear. Yipee time for the family dinner with my whole family.
I just woke up from a nap and had to get ready. Black dress and perfect hair. My grandpa had flew in from New york city just to see me!!And I wondered who would want to see me.
Chapter 2:
Oh Lily how are you my aunt kristine just asked me. Fine I said as i brushed my black curly hair behind me. How are your grades? Fair i said. Cool keep it at least to average! Ok Auntie!
Marky (my brother) came over to me. Look at that girl he said practically drooling. It was Annabeth. How does this happen!!
Chapter 3:
Annabeth looked at me all dinner as she wore her black mini and pink glittery top and pink heels. My mom looked at me. This is Annabeth Lily. Annabeth texted on her expensive I-phone.
A-awesomeness: Carmen guess who is at this family dinner Lily Smart.
Carmen1234: Holy Moly! She is so creepy
A-awesomeness: Yes but turkey is served even though I am not eating it gtg. love ya!
She slid it back in her purse. Lily gulped. The turkey came and she took some peices. She put gravy all over her potatoes and took 3 rolls. My mom looked at me with a do not take to much look on her face. I ignored her.
Annabeth looked at me rating my outfit I could tell. She wrote a 2 on a peice of paper.
Chapter 4:
Mom can I go shopping? I need a decent outfit. I bought you tons of stuff last month. Mom I m going to a private girls school. I need a decent outfit like Annabeth! Come on please. NO lily she screamed. Fine mom. Fine.
She ran to her bed grabbed her laptop and look at all the designer clothing stores. She dreamed and made a wish list....
To be continued....
- by RabbitsRule7496 |
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- | Submitted on 11/30/2008 |
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- Title: I want it All
- Artist: RabbitsRule7496
- Description: Quick just to judge my writing.
- Date: 11/30/2008
- Tags: want
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Comments (1 Comments)
- Lolvy - 12/02/2008
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AWFUL grammar!
Really, really bad!
3 points subtracted for that - its painful xo
Otherwise, good story ^^ need to get more to the point tho - Report As Spam