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Beginning of the Biogens:
The Firsts
Chapter 1
The (Math) Test!
My name is Brae, short for Braden Shelby Fleeter. Don't make fun of the name! I get that too much already. I'm that kid in your class who is always talking to the teachers, his friends, an animal, or myself. Yeah, I know I talk to much right? But I am definitely not a teacher's pet. Every teacher, I mean all the teachers have commented on my listening skills, its like," Michael Fleeter! Look at me right now. I'm talking to you!" I can hear her talking, but I can't move. I'm shouting to myself ," Move Idiot! Your going to get in trouble!", but my eyes are glued to one spot. The worst part is I'm looking directly at one single place most of the time, or should I say one person. I'm looking directly at Lizzie Sharon, my all time crush (sigh..). Don't get me wrong, but when I say I'm gonna get in trouble I don't mean from the teachers, there's this guy who gets mad at me every time! Its really annoying. We have been friends since 4th grade. We are both in 9th now. Okay enough about Lizzie, Lets get back to me. OK, I am in Algebra 1, that's enough said to make school sound like Hell. I am a Christian ,and my parents are regular attendants at my church. I was a normal guy and then.....Wait a minute! I'm getting ahead of myself okay lets start at.....
I was at the bus stop waiting for Abby,or Abigael , my all time best friend, when I hear a scratching noise near the bushes. I just waved it off as a cat.(I'm waiting for Abby remember?) I see her walking up. Abby has cherry hair with dark grey-blue highlights. She usually wears sleeved shirts but I commented her when she wore spaghetti straps and she's been wearing them ever since. She looks good overall. For some reason she turns red whenever I come. She made no exception this time. She yells," Are you ready for the math test?" I heard a click in my brain and then I thought.......Oh Crud a test! "What are you talking about?"I said. Abby says," Remember the Major Testings, or so Dr. Trodds calls them." Dr. Trodds is our Algebra 1 teacher. If he's not dramatic, I'm not sarcastic. Trust me I'm very sarcastic.
So Abby and I talked till the bus got there. The bus stopped right in front of us. Abby noticed something. She said," Oh my gosh! A new bus driver!" True enough. There she was. She had hazel colored hair and was wearing a two sizes to big jacket. Their was something strange about her facial expression, I just couldn't pick it out. Abby was at the seat where we always sat and she was waiting patiently. I sat down beside her and there it was, that red face. I just didn't get her. I looked around and I noticed another thing that was different.
A girl with tan skin, lonely hazel eyes, a skinny frame, and raven black hair. She was wearing a netted undershirt and a peach-flowered black T-shirt. It looked like she could suck me dry. Somehow, I don't know why, I wanted to be friends with her. Apparently, Abby noticed her too. She said, I'm gonna stay away from her. She looks like she could bite me." She made the best vampire face she could and said," I vant to suck your vlood! Viscous." " I'm gonna say hi," I told her. " Wha-What! Didn't you hear me! Viscous!" She made biting expressions with her mouth. I went over to the vampire girl and said," Hi. I'm Brae. What's you're name?" And mystery girl number 1 says," Go...Away." "OK, guess we're doing this the hard way," I said. And I sat down beside vampetta. I've never seen Abby's face get any redder than that moment. Now Ms.terious said,"OK my name is Anita. Happy now?" "Well hello Anita," I said, now very satisfied. Then we were at school. I found out that Anita had all the same classes as me and Abby. Maybe we'd be friends. Who knows? Well I do ,but that's later. I got to Algebra 1 and Dr. Trodds was waiting for us. "Time for the test!" He said when we came in," I hope you studied!" I sat down, got my calculator, wiped the sweat off my brow and prepared to fail. That is, until he passed them out. I looked on the test and guess what it said.
FOOLED YA!
Thank you all for studying!
I almost screamed after I read it. After all that....well not studying but umm...Worrying! But that was Dr. Trodds, always the drama king. Then I heard a voice, "Well if I wanted this, I would've joined drama," said Anita, and walked calmly out of the room. Then when I thought about it, I was surprised myself with what I did. "I actually agree. None of us signed up for your attitude." Then it was my turn to walk out. Right when I got out I heard the most surprising part of all.....Abby's voice.
"Hmm... lately you have been acting dramatic. Well actually, I think you should quit Algebra 1 and teach acting." This time I turned red. I was kinda happy that I wouldn't be in detention with only the blood suckin' diva to keep me company. I thought about the last time I was in detention. Then it hit me. I knew I had been in detention like twenty times in the past month ,but I couldn't remember any of it. Come to think about it I couldn't remember the first ten years of my life. But I shoved the thought aside when Abby came down the hall. She actually looked depressed.
I went over, put my arm on her shoulder and asked, "Hey, you okay?" She looked up, red faced again, and said,"I've never had detention before. My mom's gonna kill me." I thought hard and I felt relieved when I came up with an answer. "Don't worry, they only tell your parents if your even worse in detention. So just try not to burst out again, OK?"I said, trying my best to make my best friend better. I brushed her bangs from her face and was glad to see a smile. A dark red cheeked smile. "Thanks Brae. I needed that. Lets go talk to dark, and scary." We went over to Anita and she said, "Do you two like to follow me? Or are you just here to be annoying like everyone else?" My brain immediately responded.
OUCH! "OK, this is my friend Abby. Abby this is Anita. We are trying to be friends with you. Can't you see that? Now please stop criticizing us. Is that OK with you, or do we half to keep trying?"I asked vampire princess. "Hmm, so you want to be friends?" she said, "Well, I don't have many friends. I guess you can be my cronies." Screech! What! Well I guess it was better than annoyance. Crony huh ,sure. Abby said, "Hold up! I am not spending my school year with you, if you treat me like a dog." "I like you. You have spine, at least in front of me,"She said, "We might actually become friends." That's when I got offended then. Abby has spine and I don't! I'm not jealous ,its just..well..Agh! "Don't worry Brae, you have spine," said Anita. " I didn't say anything about that," I said. That's the first time and one of the only times I'd seen fear in her eyes. Had she read my mind? Again. Fear.
We heard the intercom say, "Anita Steners, Abby Leyner, and Braedon Fleeter, come to the detention room. "Well, let's go. I don't think they'll wait. We walked to the room in silence. Then I heard, "Dude! Who are you?" I saw a cool guy in a blue jacket and a surfing shirt on. My friend Carron was gazing at Anita with googly eyes like he does when he likes someone. Wait, Carr (like care) likes vampire girl. Anita was looking at him with a..not a bad look but more of a... confused one. "Umm, Anita this is Carr. Carr this is Anita,"I said. "Where did you come from Anny?" he asked. Uh-oh. I waited for Anita's response. I expected a slap to his face. "First, please don't call me Anny, Carr. I like my name." Was that a polite tone? I almost fainted. "Second, I used to go to, umm," she said with a confused look like I had when I tried to remember the last time I was in detention. Was this all happening for a reason? Does Anita like Carron too? Agh! That's my problem, I can't stick with one topic. "So Carr, what are you doing?" I asked while he was gazing at Anita, and Anita was questioning her sanity. "Oh!" He said straightening up, "I'm going to give Lizzie her book back."
I looked up then. I had to say something! "Oh! Tell her I said hi!" I said loudly. Idiot! Tell her I said hi! She's gonna think your such a dork. "OOOK," he said, looking at me odd like, "I'll tell her you said, 'hi!'." "Wait! I mean, I'll just tell her next block. OK?" I said quickly. "K, See ya later!" he yelled as he went. Whew! Saved by the skin of my teeth. Carr left and we were at the detention room.
- Title: I need someone to help me
- Artist: micoa13
- Description: I am writing a fiction book. I need some feedback on how i'm doing. Might not be very good. Might be good. I can't judge I wrote it.
- Date: 12/28/2008
- Tags: need someone help
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- Sunstarpokemon - 10/26/2009
- It's an interesting story, but I think you should work on your punctuation a little, and try to make the sentences a bit more flowing. But other than that you're doing fine. Keep up the good work! =D
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