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Ryu wiped the blood from the corner of his mouth and smirked at his opponent, “Good hit.” He said more to himself than Lucifer. This year Ryu was anticipating becoming a Angelic Guardian for Gweneria, so he trained and sparred quite frequently. Lucifer grinned showing his fangs and shot up into the air to strike Ryu with a blow but was blocked by Ryu’s large sword. “Alright, I think we’re done here. You’ve gotten stronger Ryu.” Lucifer said as he placed a hand on the younger boys shoulder and smiled. Ryu looked into his eye’s and felt as if he was stuck.
Ryu always knew Lucifer had a way with the women but even his smile made Ryu feel fuzzy inside. Ryu smiled back and managed to break his trance. “Do you think I am strong enough to become a Angelic Guardian?” Ryu beamed. “I know you will make it.” Lucifer stated and narrowed his eyes which made them more dark and clouded looking. “You have hidden strength that is beyond amazing Ryu. You musn’t worry.” Ryu blushed and punched Lucifer’s arm softly to break the seriousness. “Let’s go eat! I’ll race you!” Ryu yelled before extending his wings and taking off towards their headquarters at full speed.
Lucifer smiled softly, “Your on!” he yelled and swiftly jumped across the tall structures catching up with Ryu. Ryu looked over his shoulder to see Lucifer right on his tail. “Damn!” He mumbled and beat his wings to fly faster. “You wont win!” Lucifer managed to yell as he spun around a flag post and bolted into their headquarters quart yard. “In your dreams!” Ryu laughed and twirled through an open window just as Lucifer did. Ryu laughed on his back at their playing around and noticed something was on top of him. Ryu opened his eyes and saw Lucifer kneeled over him panting softly. The young boy blushed and squirmed a bit but Lucifer caught him into a heated kiss.
- by SomethingSatanic |
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- | Submitted on 02/14/2009 |
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- Title: Immortal Romance
- Artist: SomethingSatanic
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Description:
This is the first chapter of my new Yaoi/Yuri IMMORTAL ROMANCE !
In this story a young man named Ryu is anticipating becoming a Angelic Guardian, But just as he feels he is capable he has to go on a journey to find the Princess Gweneth of Gweneria. Now Ryu, his friends, and his enemies battle it out to find Prncess Gweneth while experiencing love. I know this is only the fisrt chapter but I will have more up soon ! RATE and COMMENT please ! - Date: 02/14/2009
- Tags: immortal romance fantasy yaoi yuri
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Comments (5 Comments)
- ScotchandCyanide - 06/02/2011
- I don't know...it was kind of 'eh' for me...there was no real build up or suspense...and the romance was kind of cliche. I think it needs more of your voice and not some canned excuse for fan service. Creativity and character depth are what make a story memorable. That said, your writing style isn't bad. I think you have a lot of room for improvement, but I know you can definitely improve. I did find it interesting that you depicted Lucifer as good-natured and tender. 3/5
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- mysticrydder - 03/17/2009
- its so cute! they feel the same! thats always a good thing! but i agree with meep. you have the setting down, but describe the characters and the angel guardian.
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- yasmin_funk9 - 02/27/2009
- i like it
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- solo-tigger1 - 02/14/2009
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1st yeah
it is great, but i think it needs to discripe characters more, like hair color lenbgth so on...and i would like to know what a angelic guardian is and why does Ryu want to b one so badly - Report As Spam