the Healer Of The Hearts

• Artist: Frangapani2
• Description: this is a story maybe its true or not but if it was true it would be in the non fiction so no bad comments plz.
• Date: 03/18/2009
• Tags: healer hearts

Once in a school in the mountains was a sad girl called charlotte who had no heart (of course she did it was a figure of speech) because a evil girl called linda(i know sorta sounds sharp when you say it) stole it (figure of speech she just called her names and treated her like garbage) was being followed by a strange girl in white she looked like an angel but then 1 day charlotte stoped and asked her why follow me im just gabage and words came out the the angels mouth and replied I am a healer my name is elizabeth i am here to help you so elizabeth told charlotte all about how linda was indeed a witch she would go to every school and destroy all children in her path and how elizabeth would follow her and cure the children after so that day they caught linda teasing some1 in the park and all of the children who were heartless and you don't wanna know what happens next and as soon as they did the all hearts were restored all were fulled and all were happy that no 1 saw elizabeth except charlotte.

Comments

[Frangapani2]

what i cant help it and yes it does it was just a quick 1 so blah blah blah

[Ghostly Tune]

Does constructive criticism count as a positive comment? I hope so! ^_^ Generally, when a person writes a story that they plan to share with others, it's nice to have more than one punctuation mark! Also, why don't you use grammar and spell-check before posting your work? It'd make your story that much more enjoyable. ^_^ Hope that helps!

[kyouku-chan]

i cant find any period but the end. and i think when you write a story, you should correct your spellings. if it isnt,then its garbage. and if you dont want to put those open and close parentheses, then make your figures of speech understandable