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Blood Lust
Oh, How I long to sink my teeth
Into the soft, pale flesh of her neck,
to taste the blood as it flows over my tounge.
I want to hear her gasping breath
as I close my jaws over her windpipe.
The glorious sensation of her body
going deathly still beneth my paws.
I will smile and howl in trimph
as I offer the my fresh kill to my pack.
She has tresspassed on my territory
and for that she must pay.
That is the way in my concreate jungle.
She will feel the scrape of my teeth
on her heels as I drive her down.
She will feel my claws puncture her flanks.
How I will rejoice in the feel of her flesh
give beneth my power. I smell the fear,
she has bolted, the hunt has begun.
- by Teddi-Bear-Fuzz |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 04/11/2009 |
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- Title: Blood Lust
- Artist: Teddi-Bear-Fuzz
- Description: She try'd to get my man...I decided to hunt her down. With my pack following me. - spir of the moment poem-thingy when i was angry....
- Date: 04/11/2009
- Tags: blood lust
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Lyramel - 06/26/2009
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I would figure if you were going to enter a writing piece into a competition the very least you could do was a spell check.
It completely undermines the pieces worth, it sets everything back and gives it an amateurish feel - Report As Spam
- Teddi-Bear-Fuzz - 04/16/2009
- yea I know -smile - Thanks!
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- Seiyn - 04/11/2009
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4/5.
I can feel the emotion in your writing. Very good.
Though, there were some spelling incorrections here & there.
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