Boy interrupted.

• Artist: Louise Brooks
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• Date: 07/15/2008
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He came within the city limits.
trying to keep well within it.
The other people smiled and welcomed.
they had no idea how to help him.

He sits safely in front of traffic.
none of them are gonna have it.
If I was ill with lungs clogging you'd think better than my noggin.
who would live in a world like this?
atleast my on doesnea smell of piss.

Autistic & inward bound.
my feelings are just waiting to be found.
the worlds too loud for these sensitive ears.
I'll face all my childhood fears.

Falling in love for one such as I.
Is something not meant to occur.
a parody of a young man will never get her.

I'm stuck between the stations floating on white noise.
you might not love me darling but I'm not like those other boys.

Comments

[SilvertongueSagittarius]

the flow is a tad odd but w/e. be careful of you PoV's. good rhymes though.4

[Atheshya]

My biggest problem with this is that it starts out in third person, but then switches to first person :/ You need to avoid little mistakes like that. BUT, this does have nice imagery, and some amazing rhymes - I probobly wouldn't have thought of rhyming 'noise' and 'boys', let alone 'welcomed' and 'help him'. Worthy of four stars and a favourite.