final apologies

• Artist: UNKNOW dude ii
• Description:
• Date: 07/24/2008
• Tags: theoverlordofamsterdam apology

im sorry for when i wasnt there being there
im sorry when it seemed like i didn't care
im sorry i could never make you smile
im sorry we only lasted for a short while
im sorry for never listening
im sorry for existing
im sorry for what i've done wrong
but i want you to know, my love for you still burns strong

Comments

[Chimera_Crasher]

Nice attempt, but it could have been edited with more linguistic potential
4/5

[Rachmaster67]

It flowed like poetry should, you should be a little less harsh on the voters though. Just try to put capatilazation in there, I know it's a hassle, but I just do it all the time because I practiced. Please check out mine? You don't have to if you don't want to,it's not like I force people.

[maryyupee]

i really like the poem, but the description sounds soooo harsh!!!