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i wish i was a bird,
so i could soar free.
i wish i was strong,
like bark off a tree.
i wish i was a preditor,
with a fierce roar.
but the more i wish,
i want these things even more.
i want to be barbie,
as perfect as can be.
but if i was barbie,
i wouldn't be me.
i'd be dull, plastic.
lifeless, fake.
would this be a risk,
really worth to take?
everything i'd always wanted,
to be accepted by all.
i would be like superman,
i would never fall.
but things hold me back,
i am just a puppet on a string.
the more i want to get away,
the shorter my strings seem.
i want to escape it all,
and never look back.
but remeber im not barbie,
and the things that can get me away,
are all the things i lack.
so now and forever,
i will sit and wish.
what it is like to be barbie,
in a life of plastic bliss.
- by Blackmongoose215 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 08/01/2008 |
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- Title: plastic bliss
- Artist: Blackmongoose215
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- Date: 08/01/2008
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Lord Bubbleygirl - 08/02/2009
- wow this is really good =) 5/5
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- Fancy Ninja - 02/04/2009
- I love it
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- Pressure Sensative - 12/18/2008
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I love it. It flows great and the rhyme scheme is consistent and not forced! A few suggestions though:
but if i was barbie,--- Changed to 'were' instead of 'was'
would this be a risk,
really worth to take?--- Sounds awkward... Switch up the words a little...
everything i'd always wanted,--- I've, not I'd
Other than that is absolutely wonderful 4/5 - Report As Spam
- Czarinia Lionheart - 08/02/2008
- That is so deep and awesome
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