Love is Suicide

• Artist: Shadows Dark Present
• Description: This is a poem i made when i was feeling blue. This is my work, not someone else's, so don't go hating, and be nice. Thank you.
• Date: 08/07/2008
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My heart is sinking in its own puddle of blood.
Rotting and Failing..in front of everyone.
Love is the cruelest suicide,
Nowhere to go run and hide.
I am tied down with a bunch of strings,
while you can run free, and watch as it stings.
You get to be with someone,
I'm forced to watch
I feel like i'm losing you slowly,
No way to keep you here.
How could you leave in my time of need
How could you go, as you watch me bleed.
I love you with all of my heart,
You say you love me back, stabbing me, It feels so sharp
Pain is taking over my whole body,
All i'm doing is falling...falling...falling...
You promise you are coming back,
But i hope you come before i snap.
My heart is in your hands,
Your squeezing it tightly as it oozes out blood.
While i keep your heart in tack, making sure it doesn't snap.
She's gonna take you away from me,
I'll lose my everything
Becuz you were the only thing
That kept me holding.
So here i am, You're watching me,
Can you see, I am not free?
Your grip is tight, I love you so
Now you get to watch me as i slip...as i go...

Comments

[mangasola spark]

it was a lovley peice it shows that your feelings will always show in your poem and everyone will want to see all your pieces of work

[Crimson016]

this is an amazing piece! i love it.
10/10

[Sweet_Papaya]

I like it, very romantic, in a sad way.
But, it's not "heart in tack" It's "heart in tact"

[Emilie_Aututmn]

I think you could be a really good writer if you used more creativity. Love has become very popular to write about and it gets annoying.

[aL ycious]

Ooo, WOW! "Love is Suicide"? That is like SO creative!111!

In all seriousness, this poem could have easily been 5 lines long. Pumping buckets of naiive and cliche blood imagery into a poem doesn't make it good.

[Hikaru1214]

really good..
hey?have u been hurt by love??
cuz by reading ur poem it seems like u've experience confused

[Saeya Kizuku]

I love your poem! It has very good rythm and good grammer. and the topic is one that a lot of people can relate to. You are a very talented writer!