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Prologue
“Hello Sir, would you like your car parked?” This phrase was what John’s life was about. Doomed to say that for eternity, for he was a valet. But he was different, their was something very special about him. Normal when others were around, but when they left, the “dog” ripped up his toys. That was, until he was the age of seven and his dog passed away, and he was the one to take the blame of the beheaded and disfigured baby dolls in his sister’s cribs. No-one knows where his parents are now. This is the story of John, a murderer, a psycho, a valet.
- by Lupus Coma |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/03/2008 |
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- Title: Valet- Prolouge
- Artist: Lupus Coma
- Description: Little series I'm working on.
- Date: 10/03/2008
- Tags: valet prolouge
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Comments (7 Comments)
- xiodinex - 05/24/2009
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Good start, it'll be nice to see what becomes of this =]
As for constructive criticism...Maybe change 'Psycho' to 'Psychopath'? Psycho sounds a little slang. Aside from that, pretty good =D - Report As Spam
- mz-sierra712 - 05/23/2009
- kool.....i really luv it & keep up the good work
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- lilcute0705 - 05/19/2009
- interesting... i heart luv heart it.. keep it up and keep writing cuz i really want to read more.... xd 4laugh
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- II flirty II - 05/16/2009
- kool
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- Surohm - 05/11/2009
- Really good. You should write more!
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- NiGhT4NgEll - 05/05/2009
- nice =p
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