- sweatdrop sitting all alone with pain in my system, unknowing wat is going to become of this wisdom, meaning that i know how it feals to be alone, children can be so mean and so cold. but its not only the childs fault u know, parents can be so heartles also. but after a while u give up on fitting in and u become something worst deep within. as my heart beats harder and my blood is boiling, something in me brakes and im hurtng. a couple of minuetes pass and im better, but as i look down i shreek in tarror, for the body i have dismemberd
- by ilovejessee |
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- | Submitted on 10/12/2008 |
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- Title: pain
- Artist: ilovejessee
- Description: a childs pain
- Date: 10/12/2008
- Tags: pain
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Comments (3 Comments)
- kitharion - 08/11/2011
- Is it okay that I copied this and did some minor editing? I can PM it to you, if you like smile
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- smol might - 10/12/2008
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haha dont pay attention to the guy below me
nice poem smile - Report As Spam
- SilvertongueSagittarius - 10/12/2008
- hmm... EMO! as far as overall structure, u had gud rhyms at first but then u just quit. oh, and u misspelled "TERROR" and "HURTING" and "SYSTEM" "SITTING" "WHILE" "MINUETES" and I'll assume the rest is type-os and please put it in bar/stanza format. it's so much easier to read that way
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