Empty Influence

• Artist: WastedHeart66
• Description: Second poem. Could be better than the first. Who knows.
• Date: 10/18/2008
• Tags: empty influence

It's influential in the scariest of ways
In this empty room I spend most of my days
Wondering and dreaming of wanting to fly
To spread my wings in the bright blue sky
My feathers create a trail in my hazy memory
For anyone who wants to follow this path with me
If I could just wish for one single thing
It'd be to soar in the sky with a happy song to sing
But here I am, awake and looking around
No wings to fly, only feet that touch the ground.
I sit and wonder, "Was this really meant to be?"
Let's wait till the future, and then we'll really see.

Comments

[the Renaissance Lives]

It's pretty good, and definitely flows rather well..
The only thing I'd point out is you don't always have to make cliche rhyming (I went to the store, it was a bore, makes me wanna snore, etc.)

Ah, and...the future will never come, only the present. Hehe

[Tushy Lynn]

The poem flows quite well. I enjoyed reading it. ^^