Will it Stop?

• Artist: fanasy_queen
• Description: First poem I actually put thought in, but I think it is pretty good...
• Date: 11/14/2008
• Tags: will stop

I slide through darkness, people around me, pitying, hoping, hating.
I go farther, the stares grow harsher.
I must keep going, but when will it stop?

Comments

[white horse93]

yes, definitely good potential. I'm kinda working on poems and stories. this was very...emotional. you could almost feel what you were going through...

[Damian rane]

it was good (good job)

[vardo5]

Yes. i like it. Perhaps a little vague though...

[arbiter_liderz]

yea, its not bad^^
but I kinda dont think the "hoping" word fits in.
nice work anyways!