In My Mind

• Artist: InsanePsycho91
• Description: Let me know what you think. I know that not everyone will like it, and I accept that. Just tell me what you think could make my writings improve.
• Date: 12/10/2008
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In my mind
I am someone else
Someone that nobody knows
Someone that I don't want to be

In my mind
I have become something different
Something unknown
Something I'm scared of

In my mind
I'm afraid to sleep at night
Afraid to wake in the morning
Fearful of my life by day

But then I realize
It's only in my mind
Exept my mind controls me

Comments

[yoyoyo3211]

THIS IS REALLY GOOD I GIVE IT 4/5

[Tsuki Kurai]

P-U-N-C-T-U-A-T-I-O-N
Other than that, i must agree with conceptually_concrete.

[conceptually_concrete]

I enjoy the idea of this poem. It's dark, but not in the completely idiotic emo way. However, you lost your flow on the last verse, and the final line threw me off. I'm all for freedom, but poetry has to hold to a certain structure to be aesthetically pleasing.

[Master cade]

interesting