What if...

• Artist: Act of Random Kindness
• Description: My first real attempt at poetry. I wanted some opinions, so here ya go.
• Date: 12/23/2008
• Tags: love poem original rhyme random

What If…

What if the sky was blue
One plus one is two was true
What if a person said “cute” and
The first thing I thought of was you?

What if planes soared through the sky
Bumblebees flew and no one knew why
The square-root of nine was three
And for you I would gratefully die?

What if the grass was green
Watching a sunset was a beautiful thing
And seeing you smile the day before
Simply made my heart sing?

What if all lions roared
Snowdays were awesome and the rain poured
Whenever the sky was cloudy at night
And your laughter made my heart soar?

What if three lefts made a right
The worst part of summer was mosquito bites
A cloudless, blue sky was perfect and what if
My heart skipped a beat at your sight?

What if the sky was blue
One plus one is two was true
Ponies said “neigh”, cows went “moo”
And what if I loved you?

‘Cause I do

Comments

[Random_Hugs_R_Great]

wow this is sooo AMAZING! i love it! defiantly 5/5

[IHeartSlippers]

that was really beautiful 5/5

[SmileZombiiie]

that was nice
i liked it alot 5/5
^-^

[KissMeShawol]

Really well put for a love poem. a 4/5. I know, it maybe a little harsh but I think you can work from the ground up. You have potential and I see that, keep truckin'! It's a good start! ^-^

[serrenna19]

you can really amaze me sometimes i'll give ya a 5/5

[XIII Roxas Key of Destiny]

There, rated, commented, 5/5. I'm done here. lol