Broken Words

• Artist: dizkoqueen
• Description: A poem I found in one of my notebooks dated back to 2/26 of this year. Betrayed by the one I fell for life seemed at it's end. Of course it wasn't, since I'm here now but back then it was.
  This person and I had been interested in one another for a while but once my friend found out she jumped on him like a fox on dead meat. We're not friends now and I have definitely moved on but this is a piece of my heart at the time.
  
  Open to constructive criticism.
• Date: 12/26/2008
• Tags: broken words

Looking left, Looking right,
I've never felt stupider than I've felt tonight.
I said i'm sorry,
it just came out,
I really didn't mean to shout...

No one believes me,
They say I lie,
That I'm just stupid
and deserve to die.

At first I fought,
It wasn't true,
But now I believe them...
and it's all your friends too.

I just wanted a chance,
I really did care.
But you blew me off
for the bimbo with dirty blonde hair...

Now I'm alone,
sitting at home.

Where should I run?
To go and hide...
I'm sick of him,
and all his lies.

So here I am,
just take me away,
I hate this horrible...
awful...
never-ending day....

Shoot me down,
cut off my hair,
fix me up,
i
just
don't
care.

Comments

[PureDelicatePoison]

INSANE!!!!!!
(In a good way, 5/5)

[dizkoqueen]

thank you! smile

[TheCryptexNinja]

Whoah, This poem is unexplainable. The meaning, the way it sounds when it's pronounced, the base shape of the poem, They all act like they are one. From your experience, you seem to have settled into the Human Prospect and Mind. Overall: AWESOME!!! 5/5

[lambmilk]

I agree with the comment below me. ; )

[Deceased Poet]

I absolutely love it and adore it. I can connect with it so easily. I simply just agree with you! Amazing and definately well-written.