Is it safe to be me?

• Artist: redjumpsuitlove
• Description: a poem i wrote...
• Date: 01/18/2009
• Tags: safe

Is it safe to be me
once again we play this game
this twisted mindless death-sentence
it's so frustrating
all the regret for compassion
the simplicity of your opinions
stop and think
Is it safe to be me?

Life used to be
you were a part of me
you were my everything
until you fell
until you broke apart and found a new relationship
this tragedy burning
right through my heart
right through my heart
everything falling apart
it's just me

is it safe to be me
you only see darkness now
this breakthrough is hurting you
did u forget
did i forget
something went terrribly wrong
stop and be
say it's safe to be me

Life used to be
you were a part of me
you

Comments

[AceOfTheHeart]

im sorry to say but the repption of words slightly brings down enthusiasm. try useing a wide range of words or describe something in a sense like colour or feeling id say it wasent horrible though 3/5

[Kuro Fukai]

It had it's points, and I think there is something to be said about it not being safe to be yourself.

Then think, if you're not you... then who are you?

Are you a human, a demon, a spirit?

Or maybe, you're Nobody.

Now, to the poem itself, I think it has it's potential, though, a few minor grammatical corrections could really give it that professional look.

overall, a 3/5

[princess sisille]

Tis^^ boring!

[nones here anymore]

love it, and it's never safe to be yourself, but you have to.