Madeline

• Artist: derechin
• Description: This goes out to my Sally.
• Date: 02/01/2009
• Tags: madeline

A sickened saying it is
To say you love me
But I believe you
I feel it in your heartbeat

Don't you get all the the things
I've said
That's why you can't leave me
No, you won't break me

Have I hurt you before
Don't leave
Please don't go, I'm yours
Ain't I enough hell
Shhh! Be quite
Don't yell

No, I'm plenty
With me on the ground
I've been through hell to many
Times before, I met you
Madeline, yes you

Don't you get all the things
I've said
That's why you can't leave me
No, you won't break me

Have I hurt you before
Don't leave
Please don't go, I'm yours
Ain't I enough hell
Shhh! Be quite
Don't yell

Give me all your fears
The ones you haven't met
Through all of these years
Because I won't let you suffer
I won't let you cry
I give you immortality
So you won't die

A sickened saying it is
To say you love me
But I believe you
I feel it in your heartbeat

Comments

[Kimono325]

I like the idea, I love it that it doesn't rhyme, and it flows pretty well. The wording, however, is a bit rough. And the spelling is a bit off. Nonetheless, a good poem. Work on how you word things, and it'll be much better. A word of advice, never use the word 'Ain't' in a poem. Ever.

[rosalie cutsie123]

Its kinda sad but interesting. Feels like a close death apon me