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As I was swept away
All I could think of was the 7 seven things
But the worst thing was after the 3rd i remember
My brother......
He saved me that day
He risked is life to save mine
As he tryed his best just to save me
Then i remember my sister
As she she died that day
She also gave me her life
I cried that day But now I have everything Back
But now I lost all my emotions
But I remember what my sister and my brother said
Stay on your feet
And remember us forever we will always be with you
- by mcneillek01 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/13/2009 |
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- Title: As I swept away
- Artist: mcneillek01
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This is one of my old school projects from grade 7 I'm in grade 12 now
SO ENJOY
On this poem i got 99%
SWEET - Date: 02/13/2009
- Tags: swept away
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- mcneillek01 - 02/15/2009
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- XxXTeenage_LesXxX - 02/13/2009
- its good, but i think punctuation would be very helpful. its fairly confusing without it, so you might also want to consider making it just easier to understand. u don't want someone to have to read it 4-5 times to get exactly what you're trying to say. but still not bad. i give it a 3/5
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