Never Again

• Artist: Kyosuke Date~Soul Taker
• Description: As it says in the long list of things in my profile, I hate people who drink...It pisses me off to where I'm just beyond words...
  I refuse to say anymore about this...i don't want to recall that damn conversation...
• Date: 02/16/2009
• Tags: never again

Limp body laying in my arms
Tired smile playing on your face
As your gentle breathing fills the air

I still smell it on you
It’s getting on my nerves
I try to hold my breath and ignore it
Until I’m as dizzy and lightheaded as you were

It’s difficult to protect you
When you do things that harm you
All I can do now is hold you as you recover

I’m still so angry
I can’t believe you did that
Never have I known you to do something to ridiculous
Never have I been so upset with you

Despite what happened
I know I have a beautiful angel in my arms
…I can’t stay mad at you for long

I don’t know why it was given it to you
I don’t understand why you took it
I’ll let this slide once and only once
Just promise me one thing, love

Never do it again

Comments

[Never The End]

This is very good.

[Kibroth]

A few moments that this poem shines, particularly the 2nd stanza.

Otherwise, it reads too much like a memoire or journal entry. Try to parse it down a bit. I think you're on to something here!

-K