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She tore my heart out,
She took it and threw it away,
I went up to her and gave a shout,
******** you I didn't need you anyway,
We never say each other ever after,
I was glad but felt like something was gone,
But some how the hole was fix and it was fixed with laughter,
There was a new girl she made feel really drawn,
Her smile is what took my breath away.
- by OMGPanda x3 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/25/2009 |
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- Title: A new light.
- Artist: OMGPanda x3
- Description: 3rd post and be brutal tell me what I need to improve on.
- Date: 02/25/2009
- Tags: light
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Comments (3 Comments)
- OMGPanda x3 - 03/03/2009
- Thnx for the critasisme smile
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- Ariero - 03/01/2009
- Sorry Jake, can't really be brutal, hehe. Ummmm, some how is one word....and instead of saying "the hole was fix and it was fixed with laughter" you could say it was fixed with laughter cause then you wouldn't be repeating yourself.Anyways, you did great(as always.)
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- OMGPanda x3 - 03/01/2009
- Come on some one post on this plz.
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