PITY IN LOVE

• Artist: louise_5_a
• Description: ABOUT LOVE IN DISGRACE?
• Date: 04/25/2009
• Tags: pity love

PITY IN LOVE

OH, LIFE OF MINE SO FULL OF MISERIES
FROM THE VERY BEGINNING
LOVE HAS SMITTEN ME
BUT UNTIL NOW THE END HAS NOT YET COME
FOR ME TO OBTAIN ANY COMFORTS

WHY IS THAT YOU REPAY MY AFFECTION
BY MAKING ME HOPE
AND BE WISTFUL
AND YOU GIVE IN THE GUISE OF TESTAMENT
FOR HEAVEN IS MERCY
AND I SHOULD WAIT FOR IT

HEAVEN'S MERCY AND YOU OWN MERCY
ARE THEY ONE AND THE SAME PERHAPS?
I SUSPECT THEY ARE NOT YOUR TRUE PITY
WOULD NOT BE THE SAME AS THAT GIVEN BY HEAVEN

IS THAT YOUR ANSWER TO MY MISERY?
THAT I LOOK UP TO HEAVEN FOR MERCY?
MISFORTUNES HAS OVER TAKEN MY FATE
YOUR LOVE AND LOYALTY IS FOR
SOMEONE ELSE

Comments

[Im-a-pixie-233]

Yes, this is good; though the caps are annoying and the grammar should be fixed.

[RisexWithxthexDead]

First off, the poem overall was good. But there were many grammar and spelling mistakes. Also, don't use caps. They just take away from the poem and make it look like you don't mean what you say.

[clumsy-story of my life]

well, first off, you may want to fix alot of your spelling mistakes. secondly, its pretty good, i like your word choice. read mine sometime??