Trapped in my mind

• Artist: steamyhottwaffle
• Description: This poem is something i wrote in Creative Compusition last semester and i've been tweaking it ever since it was graded. so tell me what you think. Tell me what you make of it and how you decipher it....what do you think it means?
• Date: 05/04/2009
• Tags: trapped mind

Quaint smiles brighten the room
The face you see, you feel, you touch
The way you’re there and then your not.
You make me scream and shout and rot.
I’m not yours to keep or not even mine.
I keep to myself and close the world
To my mind. I want to stay, but I want to go.
This cage that keeps me, rusted and old,
Is why your there and I am here. Bring me
Home to my mother and father. Help me understand
Why it’s so dark and lonely. Why must I stay and you may go?
Why can I look but not see.
I keep to myself and close the world to my mind.

Comments

[steamyhottwaffle]

Valoralin the point of poetry is to let its reader make their own analyisis of the words, and what it makes them feel.

[Dark Necronus]

Waffle never ever be modest! You are soooo awesome at poetry! The concepts you base your poems on are so unique and enrapturing. Keep writing, we all love it! =D 5/5

[Valoralin]

truth be told i don't know what it's about. Is it a child being held in prisoner or is it a person with a split personality only letting one out as the real one stays behind locked inside? Do u know ur self what u have righten? It looks like a very well righten retail to me. So what is it? ^_^ oh and by the way it is really good. ^_^ 5/5