Is it me?

• Artist: XxNekoSorceressxX
• Description: This is about maybe u not finding love.
• Date: 06/26/2009
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Sometimes love goes out to the heartless.
Who don't even deserve it.
They are the ones that find their soulmate.
What about me, Is it too late?
I'm trying to figure out.
If I should let it out and shout.
Or just go home
So I can moan and groan.
Why can't I find love.
All my heart does is get shoved.
Was it something I did?
Was It something I said?
I don't know anymore.
I don't feel anymore.
What's the point in being lovestruck?
When the only thing your gonna get is painstuck.
Am I that broken, that no one can touch me?
Am I really that ugly.
No, I'm beautiful.
I'm way to cool.
Sly guys don't deserve me.
Because I am way to pretty.
Yes, that is the true reason.
I am way to free.

Comments

[ree-ree_bear]

She basically explained what I was about to explain to you but what I
Want to add on is, your cliché rhyming sucks. Change it.
And your topic is mainstream be different.
Your not too bad.

[Pikajane]

This was a little too teen-cliche for me. You just see too many poems about love and depression and heartbreak, I would love to see something with a more refreshing topic to it. There were a few times where you actually rhymed the same word with itself, and the inconsistencies of line length gave the poem an awkward flow. May I suggest you try a different rhyme scheme? Also, when you said "to" in the final lines, it is supposed to be "too". Good look in your further poetry writing endeavors.