Black bird

• Artist: blackmagic2005
• Description: This is based of a story that i have begun to wright, called blackbird:curse of the crow...its not in the wrighting areans yet but im hoping to have it there soon! i hope you enjoy!!!^^
  
  (If there are any grammer mistakes please let me know and don't be harsh about it! thank you!!!^^)
  
  P.S. comments are loved!!!!
• Date: 09/16/2009
• Tags: black bird

Blackbird,blackbird
flap your wings,
what sad news are you to bring?

for ever locked up in the tower,
in the darkness you do cower
for ever stuck with in this curse

and nothing more can be worse
for ever stuck as a bird as black as night
you give those a round you quite a fright!

you once were human
and once did wrong,
now forever cursed to be a crow

there will be things you'll never
know, only during the day can you leave the tower,
then at night when the moon rises high, you are to take that lonely
flight as the bird as black as night,

can this curse be broken?
is there any will to fight?
only if you can find someone to take that flight with you no matter what,
wether you are crow or not!

then you will be free from this curse,
but there are things that could be worse...

Comments

[doodie_dinosaur]

Damn it. It was too long. I'm gonna pm you.

[doodie_dinosaur]

Good start. I like your wording and fairly large vocabulary (there is always room for expansion there). But there are grammatical errors.
So, please don't be offended that I'm doing this. I'm honestly trying to help you because I really like your work.


"Blackbird, blackbird,
flap your wings.
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