The Wind

• Artist: DarkestLightest
• Description: This was a spur of the moment thing and some people said it turned out good and some dent so i thought i would get everyone else opinion...I dont care what you want to say just say it
• Date: 09/28/2009
• Tags: wind

I look up at the sky
The clouds float, still, peaceful.
just waiting for the wind.
to come and take them to place's afar.
The water silent, unmoving starts to ripple as wind passes.
The trees rustle as it passes through, moving side to side as if they dance to the wind's beat.
I lay here in the field as it passes over, moving the grass around me.
I lay here in this field, In peace.

Comments

[le Eloise]

This is a beautiful piece! heart but as what @princess1luv said, you might wanna change a couple of word usage smile

[princess1luv]

you have some bad choices of words here
just revise it.
(the water ripples as the wind passes) it sounds more comical than poetic