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i am alone and hurt
I wonder why this happened to me
i hear myself screaming in my head for help i don't want
I see him day after day
i want for it to have never happened
I am alone and hurt
i pretend i'm happy and smiling
I feel hopeless and numb
i touch the childhood i should've had, not the one i got
I worry that I won't be able to get over this
i cry for what he did to me
I am alone and hurt
i understand i should tell my mother,my brother or anyone but i won't
I say I'm okay when I'm not
i dream about a day when i can forget and be happy again
I try to trust my boyfriend when he did nothing wrong I can't though because of the person who hurt me first
i hope to be happy like i was before
I am alone and hurt.
- by xXhopeless_romantic14xX |
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- | Submitted on 10/04/2010 |
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- Artist: xXhopeless_romantic14xX
- Description: This is poem 2 it's another one that my teacher got us to write this time she provied us with the first two words in every sentence which i will mark the words she gave us in red to show you.your comments and voting would be very helpful to me.again like all my poems this is 100% me.
- Date: 10/04/2010
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Comments (3 Comments)
- xXhopeless_romantic14xX - 12/15/2010
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thank you for the suggestion
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- Yutora - 12/15/2010
- Second sentence; 'I wonder why this happen to me', I would change happen to 'happened'. Also; 'I touch the childhood i should've had not the one i got', it would be better if you but a comma in-between the 'not' and 'the', like this: I touch the childhood I should've had, not the one I got. You should put some commas in other places too. Either way, this was pretty nice. 4/5.
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- Alpha-Wolf-Madyrn - 10/19/2010
- very original smile 5/5
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