Day by Day

• Artist: Kioko260
• Description: this is what happens to me when im by myself.
• Date: 01/15/2011
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Dont you hate it when your mind starts to wander? Penetrating the part of your brain that you built a wall around; causing the contents to pour out and overflow. Drowning you softly as you pointlessly belt out for help. Its waves caress your voice and smother it into a murmur.

Comments

[Idiosyncratic Quirk]

I like the content but its execution shows little to no effort.
The grammar needs enhancing - punctuation specifically.
HOWEVER, I like your message. You get a 3/5. Though, if this were on a scale to one to ten, I'd give you a 7.