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Clouds
Keep passing me by .... Why?
Why does everyone grow up .
I wish
I wish I could stay young forever ...
I dream
I dream you would come to take me away .
Away
Away from the world
Forever young
I close my eyes
I dream
I dream you can take me away ...
I sense that you where here....
I open my eyes.
Your carrying me to Neverland.....
I look back .... "Goodbye everyone" I sad so softly..
- Title: Leaving the world beyond
- Artist: lamefck
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Description:
This a dream I had once .
I hope you like it. I'm still new at these poems . - Date: 04/25/2011
- Tags: leaving
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Comments (5 Comments)
- lamefck - 05/29/2011
- Okay. Thank you.
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- Symphonic Maiden - 05/29/2011
- I like it a lot. But in the second to last line (Your carrying me to Neverland.....), "Your " should be changed to "You're". And in the fourth to last line (I sense that you where here....) "where" should be "were". 5/5 Other than that. biggrin
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- lamefck - 04/28/2011
- Thank you.
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- Crisstella - 04/28/2011
- wow very beautiful! i love it!
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- lamefck - 04/27/2011
- Hmmm.
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