Hope

• Artist: AlKedeshDerech
• Description: Is there hope for us
  Is there a chance
  For i know everyday i live
  a girl
  out of misery and grief
  ends her life
  Is there hope
  tears falling
  is there a chance
  can we rise again
  this is a prayer for humanity
  i plead god to help us
  wars start
  bodys fall
  is there hope
  is there hope
  
• Date: 06/20/2011
• Tags: hope suicide help tears hopelessness

this was inspired by suicides and such.

Comments

[Pure_Celestial_Snow]

i like this poem a lot its inspirational

[Reneaphalias]

Ok, so this one is pretty cool... I like the concept, it just needs a bit of fine tuning. #1. Please use correct capitalization and punctuation. It is very hard to rate poems high if you are not spelling things correctly, and also if you're not using punctuation at all. #2. the line: for I know everyday I live, and then says a girl, I would tie those two lines together better. I had to read it three times for it to make sense. #3. Put question marks after "Is there a chance".