ok, i write poems from time to time. will you let me know how i'm doing?

tell me if youlike them, ill post the other 6 ive written.

poem 1:
SAND AND STONE


THE ONE I THOUGHT WOULD NEVER LEAVE,
TURNED TO SAND BENEATH MY FEET,
THE ACHES AND PAINS IN MY HEART,
IS NOTHING COMPARED TO MY RACING MIND,
HOW COULD IT BE THAT THE ONE CONSTANT IN MY LIFE,
IS NOW CHANCING DEATH,
I DONT UNDERSTAND,
WHY WOULD SHE,
TURN ON ME,
I'VE ALWAYS NEEDED HER, MORE THAN SHE KNEW,
AND I THOUGHT I COULD TELL, IF SOMEONE NEEDED ME,
BUT NOW THE TABLES ARE SPINNING,
SHE NEEDS ME,
BUT,
TO BE THE ROCK,
SHE HAS TO FALL,
FALL AND TRUST I WILL BE THERE,
AS SHE TURNS TO SANT, AND I STONE,
SHE'S STILL MY STONE.
ok, poem 2:

SOARING WITHOUT WINGS


TWIST, TURN, FLAIL,
I'M FLYING, YET FALLING,
SOARING WITHOUT WINGS,
LOVING THE KNOWLEDGE ,
THAT THE END IS NEAR,
MY PERSONAL END IS IN SIGHT,
I COULD OPEN MY EYES,
AND SEE BELOW,
THERES THE END,
I GRIN WITH THIS FACT,
THAT I CAN CONTROL,
JUST THIS LITTLE PART,,
JUST A PART,
OF THIS BIG WIDE WORLD,
IS UNDER MY CONTROL,
SURE ITS JUST A SINGLE SOUL,
BUT NO LONGER WILL
THIS SPIRIT HURT,
THIS BODY ACHE,
NO LONGER WILL I,
CRY MYSELF TO SLEEP,
I WILL NO LONGER BE HURT,
BECAUSE IM SOARING WITHOUT WINGS.
... poem 3:

A POEM OF TIME

A LONG TIME AGO,
WHEN THE WORLD WAS NEWLY SEWN,
TIMES WERE BETTER,
DEPRESSION WAS UNKNOWN
LOVE WAS LOVE,
AND HEARTS WERE WHOLE
SOMETIMES I DREAM
DREAM OF THAT TIME
WHICH WASNT LONG AGO
YET A LIFETIME BACK.
sure... poem 4:

PEOPLE ASK

'HOW CAN YOU SURVIVE
IN THIS WORLD OF UNKNOWN,
WITH NOT A TEAR IN YOUR EYE?
HOW CAN SHE GO ON,
WITH NE'ER A SOB,
NOR BROKEN HEART,
AND SMILES OVERFLOW?'
I CANT ANSWER I INQUIERIES,
I HEAR EVERYDAY,
WITH OTHER THAN,
ITS NOT ALL AS IT SEEMS.