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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 10:53 pm
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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 10:56 pm
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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 11:00 pm
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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 11:10 pm
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alright. now this is just a personal preference. just for the eyes i would pretty it up a little, you dont have to add pictures like i did, but add color and use different color for people when speaking, which goes hand in hand with the next part, organize the speaking, a little confusing and what not. lets see, i would have picked to go for tentomon or floramon separately, so not at the same time. focus more on devoting all your attention to rping, and in another time write the song. now here is sorta the main thing i didnt like, but the problem is its a personal preference. You made it seem too far fetched, about getting the money that is. Im not a street performer, but im sure they dont make that kind of money in that time, especially if people were already going to see music playing. those are the only pointers, and im not the best editor so you dont have to listen to me, thats only what i like and i have no clue what the judge likes
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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 11:21 pm
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USSR_canine alright. now this is just a personal preference. just for the eyes i would pretty it up a little, you dont have to add pictures like i did, but add color and use different color for people when speaking, which goes hand in hand with the next part, organize the speaking, a little confusing and what not. lets see, i would have picked to go for tentomon or floramon separately, so not at the same time. focus more on devoting all your attention to rping, and in another time write the song. now here is sorta the main thing i didnt like, but the problem is its a personal preference. You made it seem too far fetched, about getting the money that is. Im not a street performer, but im sure they dont make that kind of money in that time, especially if people were already going to see music playing. those are the only pointers, and im not the best editor so you dont have to listen to me, thats only what i like and i have no clue what the judge likes Ok well thank you for that review I would like to make a few comments about the review , I wasn't trying to get Floramon I didn't intend to obtain her I just thought it seemed like a good idea to put if no one entered , which they did , but good for them . Um lets see oh yes here is one , um Lance is one to do challenging things to do stuff so I made the story based on his persona . Many people are anxious to enter the concert so to pass the time find a live perfomer , but honestly I don't think I did a good job (because of the many comments I get in the outside world) , but to me I thing I may have a shot
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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 11:24 pm
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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 11:29 pm
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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 11:30 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 28, 2010 4:45 am
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Posted: Wed Jul 28, 2010 7:02 am
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USSR_canine levelnight20 USSR_canine levelnight20 Lets see Penguinmon-Windy Gabumon-Kain Floramon-I'm gonna say King Tentomon-No clue for tentomon i would say its between me and liger, sorry ichigo ha ha. i think he might have a little more idk *Night punches USSR* I'm not a good writer so mean , page 2 or 3 sorry didnt see it i know i have a 1% win ratio but it is more on 0%
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Posted: Wed Jul 28, 2010 7:16 am
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Posted: Wed Jul 28, 2010 9:53 am
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-InsertEgoHere- Liger Crew
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Posted: Wed Jul 28, 2010 10:02 am
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Posted: Wed Jul 28, 2010 10:45 am
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Posted: Wed Jul 28, 2010 11:12 am
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