Hey i just wanted to see what you guys thought of this poem i wrote a while back. It was the first poem that submitted to poetry.com and i could have gotten an award for it if i attended this ceremony thing. I wrote this poem in 9th grade (im a graduate now) for my teacher as apart of the class and its what really started my career into writing.
Please enjoy.
Light Bulb
Bright Flashes on the ceiling, Lighting all but the dark creveses, To luminious to look upon, Blanketing a room with white, untouchable fire, Hidding behind painful semi-clear glass, Dark with a force, Nothing more then a light bulb.
I like when people take even the most mundane or unexpected of things and make them into artistic pieces, not that I can do that, but I like how it was done in this particular instance. There's small spelling errors, but nothing that really detracts from it. I guess you're just kinda posting this for posterity's sake, but if I were critiquing, I'm not sure if I'd directly mention in the poem that you're writing about a light bulb; I mean, it's not a problem that you do, sometimes it's fun to have people figure it out for themselves, though. Good piece smile
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