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Beware. Once you cross the line will you ever see the other side?
Practice Writing
Luxurious quietly drank the air, haunting her ears and echoing inside of her body. Echoes of golden streams soared and splattered across the floor, warming the corners of her heart. Yet as she gazed out past the thin shred of glass that broke her apart from the vivid nature she still saw droplets of crystals lingering in the sky; gliding above her and glistening like diamonds. The pale orb of the moon sat there, like a gorgeous pearl, voluptuous in its own single perfection. Another roaring orb wrapped in lush ruby flames peered above the jagged jaws of the mountains, stalking the misted hair beauty that always lay at the opposite end of the sky with her jewels trailing after her. When panther skin stretched across the sky Moon reined, unrelenting in her peerless beauty. Not even the silkiest flower petal could compare to raw jade of her cold and soft flesh which Sun could only sweetly fantasy.

Fazed by what she reached the tourmaline gaze ripped away, softening as they perched swiftly upon a warming sight. Ripples glided down her back as she stared, her eyes low and content.

Testing out some writing n'stuff. Trying to get myself to use s'more description and all....


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  • User Comments: [2]
    Cookie Conundrum
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    Thu Jan 18, 2007 @ 02:20am


    Since I usually get too lazy to do it in my Rp posts, and that it's more of a chore to do, I don't use my full potential when writing.

    But in order to aid you in your quest to be a better writer I shall just say for you to use more Rhetoric. Rhetoric is what makes a truly good writer. <3

    (:


    Knightraven
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    Thu Jan 18, 2007 @ 03:49am


    Very impressive, sis...maybe a little overdone if anything wink I get lost in the sheer abundance of metaphor, which is also a problem I had when reading Moorcock


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