everythingn will be all right

• Artist: Boots in the rain
• Description: its not completely finished, just the first verse and chorus please pm or comment me if you have any suggestions or [u]constructive[/u] critasism
  NOTE: all the mis-spelling is because i want u to rea it how i intend it to be pronounced, like goin instead of going
• Date: 07/23/2008
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its rainin outside
and theres nowhere to hide
and nothans goin right
im so stressed,
everything is a mess
and i dont know what to do
i dont know where im goin-
or where, ive, been

[chorus]
all i know is im here right now
singin all these blues songs
here right now
singin for a livin
no pay, no way
soakin wet
and i can bet that
ill be here
one more day

Comments

[Boots in the rain]

ok, nice to know theirs a crittic in the house.

[SilvertongueSagittarius]

dont colorize it. i had to lean into my monitor to read it. anyway, FAIL! spelling-atrocious rhyming-weak and tired flow-deplorable. crumple this up and try for a 3 pointer in the trash

[maddog012]

it is goin great. thanks for the link to find it. i think that you should check out the verse luna hanna put down.

[The Koishii Warrior]

I like it. But it could be added on to a little bit more. Still deserves a good score though

[Luna hanna]

it seems like you are confused and don't know what to do with life...am I right?
if so here is something the might help you you can change the order words whatever with it...its yours I am just throwing ideas to you
"Sun rises and sets
will I be standing here tomorro again
singing along with birds
following the shadows of the trees
is there something to come for me?
is what I am waiting for near the shore?
or do I have to sail away into the blue ocean..."
best wishes!