The Equation of my heart

• Artist: Lorax in Wonderland
• Description: I wrote this song August 2nd after a boy (Zach), my best friend and current crush, promised me that when we got to the festival that he would ride rides with me But he didn't tell me that he had to work at a booth and then broke the promise by not going on rides with me. Please, please, please comment! Ihate it when people vote and not comment.
  
• Date: 08/04/2008
• Tags: heart love broken lemonade festival

You say your really smart
But I don't think thats the truth
You have yet to figured out
The equation of that thing that races when I see you
No I'm not talking about my mind,
its my fragile heart thats been broken many times
Why am I having so much trouble
Expressing my true feelings to your face?

Tell me why, don't you see.
Tell me what I can do
Tell me what am I doing wrong
Tell me how to solve the impossible,
Tell me how can you be the only one I think can solve
the equation, the equation of my heart

When ever you walk by,
my heart beats a thousand times
And the only thing I really wanna do
is spend more time with you

I wanna sip lemonade with extra sugar
Wanna ride on the rides and not bothered by the long waiting lines
Let us jump to the front,
We don't wanna waste time!

Tell me why, don't you see.
Tell me what I can do
Tell me what am I doing wrong
Tell me how to solve the impossible,
Tell me how can you be the only one I think can solve
the equation, the equation of my heart

Ohhhhhh, I wanna sip lemonade with extra sugar
Wanna ride on those rides and not bothered by those long waiting lines
Let's jump to the front,
We don't wanna waste this time!

Tell me why, don't you see.
Tell me what I can do
Tell me what am I doing wrong
Tell me how to solve the impossible,
Tell me how can you be the only one I think can solve
the equation, the equation of my heart

Comments

[Queen Bvee]

nice lyrics ^_^ it makes me really want to hear it sung :]

[iiFuzzyBlueLights]

5/5. there i commented : )

[Lucifus Lovechild]

I think it's nice, the wording and meter/rhythm aren't very artistic, and you use a lot of cliches which are usually frowned upon in poetry (hearts beating 1000 times, fragile/broken heart) but I think this poem is has some emotion visible and I think if you worked with comparisons and experimented with words it could be much more poetic. Also, I think the rides/amusement park idea might work really well if you played it out more. "ride rides" doesn't do it justice.

[Lucifus Lovechild]

I think it's nice, the wording isn't real cautious with meter/rhythm and you use a lot of cliches which are usually frowned upon in poetry (hearts beating 1000 times, fragile/broken heart). I think this poem, though, is awesome at conveying the emotion and I think if you worked with comparisons and experimented with words it could be much more poetic. Also, I think the rides/amusement park idea might work really well if you played it out more. "ride rides" doesn't do it justice.