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from the first time i saw her i wished her mine
but when i go near her i turb the color lime.
one day i had courage an asked her out but
then i was rejected and i lay about
building the tenshun inside of me i tried an tried
to break free. i still have hope in a black empty
heart but its getting dimmer i might have to restart........
hope you like it xd
- by chakalakaconverse |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/04/2008 |
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- Title: love lost then i hoped
- Artist: chakalakaconverse
- Description: a poem i wrote for me getting rejected and hope is still with me
- Date: 12/04/2008
- Tags: love lost then gained
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Comments (7 Comments)
- OneWithDunamis - 03/14/2009
- It needs spellcheck as well.
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- dark_angel6587 - 12/07/2008
- it needs some work but it is a good start 3 stars
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- Golden Sarah-Belle - 12/07/2008
- eh. its ok. it needs some serious revision
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- xXxVynn_Vampire_10_10xXx - 12/06/2008
- this is pretty good!! ^^ I give it a 4
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- Xelacire - 12/06/2008
- Well..... since im ur FRIEND i couldnt say it was bad but is isnt so i give you a 4. smile
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- chakalakaconverse - 12/04/2008
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i meant thoughts my bad
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- chakalakaconverse - 12/04/2008
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anyone can tell me their thouts about it
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