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Telling people secrets is hard =( Welp, still in school and having some fun real life issues right now, sooooo I wrote a poem to help battle my stupidity. Didn't work but ya know, now you get a fresh new poem I just wrote last week. Huzzah! If you don't understand it, that's okay, you weren't meant to. If you do understand it, huzzah! Band-Aid (Breaking A Rule) My stomach's turning My forehead's sweating The hairs on the back ----of my neck are pricking My mouth is dry My tongue's too big I can't get the words ----to fit past my lips You're all staring at me, patiently waiting The air has gone still and the fear's not abating I'm shifting nervously from one foot to the other I don't know how the news will blow over Maybe I'm foolish Maybe it's too late Maybe I shouldn't do ----this face to face I suppose it's stupid I don't know how you'll react I'm just so afraid ----you'll all turn your back You're still watching me as I mumble an apology I'm starting to wonder what's come over me Since thirteen I've never felt safe in my skin But what makes me so afraid of my kin? I remember my childhood All the scrapes and the cuts Stinging alcohol cleaning ----out all the dust All those stupid band-aids They stuck straight to the skin You jerk them off quickly ----and the pain's over then But this band-aid is sticky and I don't have the strength So I'll peal it off slowly, length by length And what if you're the dirt that will irritate this wound? What if I'm taking off the band-aid too soon? I've stood here too long I look like a fool I've broken the 'taking off ----the band-aid' rule I'll simply leave you to ponder While I clumsily dodge it I've never felt safer ----here in my closet PS:: Don't forget people that there are other poems. Please read and comment on those too.

Posted by: Rass Fri May 20, 2005 @ 11:17pm

[b:723929a83e]A First On TV

This is the twentieth century,
you are there, preparing to skin
a human being alive. Your part
will be to remain calm.[/color:723929a83e][/b:723929a83e]

-David Ignatow[/color:723929a83e][/align:723929a83e]

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RedEveLit
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Commented on: Sun May 22, 2005 @ 04:30am


	I really like this poem, I think that the rhyme is great. At first I noticed it wasn't as strong, but towards the middle it picks up. I also love the symbolism in it, to a wound, that's awesome. Very nice!

Commented on: Mon May 23, 2005 @ 11:03pm


	I really like the depth in this poem. It's not everyday you see one like this. I'm deffinately chasing down the person who wrote this and asking to see more of their writings. I wonder if they'll let me post this in my blog... sweatdrop

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Commented on: Wed Jun 01, 2005 @ 06:10am


	I love how you described it like the band aid thing. x3 That's so cool. I like the depth to the poem... it's not like it's so weird it's hard to understand, but you do have to look into it to get it. I love how it conveys what it felt like.

Commented on: Fri Jun 03, 2005 @ 12:18pm


	vurry goooooooood 3nodding someone has talent wink

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Commented on: Mon Jun 13, 2005 @ 05:18am


	heart

Commented on: Fri Jul 08, 2005 @ 11:00am


	It's quite a sad poem, but beautiful. Melancholic. heart

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Commented on: Fri Jul 08, 2005 @ 02:03pm


	That poem is awesome you are very talented you should try to be published.

Commented on: Sat Jul 09, 2005 @ 03:22pm


	Wow. Seriously thats all I can say right now is wow.

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Commented on: Fri Jul 15, 2005 @ 09:20pm


	heart 10/10

Commented on: Fri Jul 15, 2005 @ 10:13pm


	beautifully written and great representation i positively luuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuv it!!!! heart

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Commented on: Sat Jul 16, 2005 @ 01:43am


	I love it! The way you described it with the band-aid thing... Awesome!!

Commented on: Sat Jul 16, 2005 @ 04:46am


	Just one word..wow surprised . If only I could write that well. 11/10 heart

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Commented on: Sat Jul 16, 2005 @ 04:50am


	its really good, i can tell you put alot of emotion in it...i no this sound weird but i feel as though i can feel your pain through your words

Commented on: Sat Jul 16, 2005 @ 06:02am


	Wow, i love it. It's beautyful.. how you talked about it as a 'band aid' and whatnot. It's lovely. xD I wish i could write poetry that good. nod <3

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Commented on: Sat Jul 16, 2005 @ 06:25am


	-jealous- Personally, I'm not much of a poetry fan...or even a reading fan. But of course the promise of a prize is too awesome for me not to see. You're a good writer, a very good writer even. xd I have a friend who writed poetry and forces me to read them, if you want, I'll send you a few. Now give me my prize.

Commented on: Sat Jul 16, 2005 @ 06:51am


	i am not much for the rhyming poetry. in fact im not for it quite a bit. your poem is a very good metaphor for how a simple band-aid is like manythings in life. taking off a band-aid is painful for some people but not all people. so really certian problems only apply to some.. a simple scrape is a wound and in life... you know i might be inturprateing this wrong... im sorry. smile but it's a very good poem. you might want to enter some contests though your english teacher or whatever.

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Commented on: Sat Jul 16, 2005 @ 07:54am


	heart heart heart

Commented on: Sat Jul 16, 2005 @ 08:05am


	Speachless. Good thing I can still type though. I'm not much of a poetry fan, but wow...just wow. <333

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Commented on: Sat Jul 16, 2005 @ 08:41am


	thats a good poem. i kinda of understand it and then i kinda don't. either way good poem. it's got me thinking now.

Commented on: Sun Jul 17, 2005 @ 11:11am


	^^ "I love how you resemble problems with people as wounds and scraps and your closet as a band-aid. Also, that if you leave you closet it before people calmed down its like taking off a band-aid to soon. No one, or thing, healed fully yet. Great metaphor and poem. "

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Commented on: Sun Jul 17, 2005 @ 01:20pm


	It starts off ok but gets really better thoughout the story and has a bang for the ending which makes you content! Which is what a good poem needs biggrin

Commented on: Tue Jul 26, 2005 @ 02:00am


	Wow! I am so going to 'copy paste' that and say I wrote it. >.< Just kidding. heart

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Commented on: Tue Aug 02, 2005 @ 10:00pm


	I really like how you used the pain of peeling off a bandaid to describe this pain your feeling. Very beautifully written!

Commented on: Mon Aug 08, 2005 @ 11:19am


	Maybe only family understands it. If you know what I mean. I really enjoyed this poem. It has GREAT rhythm. And I don't think I could have stopped reading IF I TRIED! I'm not even a poetry person. This one was great, a superb description for the feeling I've been having for years. (Man, how I wish I didn't understand this one.. I'm running out of air in this closet.) I'm going to read it again, actually.

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Commented on: Sun Aug 21, 2005 @ 06:25pm


	I really do like this one. And I understand it, which is a plus, though I've been in this situation a couple times.

Commented on: Fri Sep 02, 2005 @ 01:26am


	Very true to yourself I see.

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Commented on: Thu Jan 05, 2006 @ 11:12am


	Huzzah! I don't even care what that means, but it sounds awesome!!! Not as awesome as this poem thouh! I do not understnad itand yet I do. I can relate and yet I can't. This is just adding to my usua indesiciveness. Well great write, you are very talented and I enjoy reading your work. Congrats on another awesome poem!

Commented on: Sat Jan 28, 2006 @ 03:23pm


	Im pretty sure i get the symbolism. Its a great poem and,again,a great message.(i probably should have read these in the order that you posted them but oh well). If you havent already you should get some of these published.