PLEASE DON'T LAUGH AT ME!!! im putting the first page of my story in here and i don't know if it will make you puke or not but please just dont puke andd tell me if it sux ok??? and help me to make it anti-pukified please??? ok here it is....try to make it to the bathroom if you do feel the need to puke....
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The rain tapped lightly against the windows of Harrold’s car as he drove along the slick road to school. It was a Monday morning in April and the weekend was sorely missed. Harrold had a feeling that the upcoming week would be a stressful one and longed for another day of relaxation. He tried to forget about the headache that was pounding his skull relentlessly. He looked up to the rear view mirror to make sure his hair wasn’t too tousled. It pretty much was. Harrold was too tired to fix it.
When he made it to school, the rain had turned to a slight drizzle. Harrold grabbed his books from the passenger seat and prepared himself for the boring day of school that lay ahead. When he got out of his car, the cool mist felt good on his hot skin. He took his time getting to the front door. The moment Harrold stepped through the entrance, he was met by his admirers — or “wanna-be’s” as his friends called them. They basically thought Harrold was the coolest thing that walked the Earth.
In the eyes of his wanna-be’s, his friends, and the girls in school, Harrold was quite good looking. His dirty blonde hair usually looked as though he had just been out in the wind, but the natural look seemed to work for him. His hair was long, and always in the way of his brown eyes. Every feature on his face was charming, and all the girls loved him, but Harrold was uninterested. He had tried the whole dating thing a couple of times before but the relationships never worked out, or lasted very long for that matter. It just wasn’t his thing.
Harrold pushed passed all his wanna-be’s, not in the mood to have to deal with any of them, and went straight to his locker where his real friends stood waiting.
“Happy birthday, Harrold!” They all said in unison.
“Hey, yeah, thanks.” Harrold replied, his mind elsewhere. His friends crowded around as Harrold fiddled with the lock on his locker.
“Harrold, are you feeling ok?”
“Yeah, you look off today.” His friends showered him with looks of confusion and concern.
“I’m feeling fine guys. I just have a slight headache, nothing to worry about.” Harrold replied, keeping his focus on his locker. As Harrold started shuffling around for the books and binders that he needed, he asked a question before any of his friends could ask him another one.
“Where’s Derrick?” His friends shrugged their shoulders and shook their heads.
“Probably getting himself into trouble again.” Harrold’s closest friend Derrick always seemed to get himself into some sort of predicament. It was almost as if he went looking for trouble. Derrick was a big joker who’s never caught frowning. Harrold didn’t think he had ever seen him unhappy.
Harrold shut his locker just as the bell rang. He said goodbye to his friends as he sauntered off to his first class. They all yelled “happy birthday” down the hall after him. Harrold just waved in response.
Harrold was pounded with work in every class. Luckily, his history class was scheduled to watch a movie which gave him a little time to relax. Harrold glanced at the seat next to him. It was empty. Derrick was still missing. He leaned back in his seat and watched the pictures of famous history figures flash across the screen as a monotone voice narrated the accomplishments they made. Harrold soon found himself lost in his own thoughts only to be interrupted by the sudden sound of the classroom door being opened.
kay so that is the first page and i bet you r puking rite now i'm so sorry but i was verry afraid of puttin this here and i still am but kirsten and melissa helped me so dont puke...
are there any suggestions of how to make it better?????????
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