I made up most of this in Calculus today; we were going over stuff I already knew, so it's okay. Whoever reads this, see if you can figure out what inspired it. Oh, and there are some style changes that are hard to show in text, so you'll have to make it up... or just look at my silly notation. This is definitely heavy metal/symphonic metal. With elements of P.O.D. edit: there has been editing
*Chorus:*
Would you mind if I died here?
I've been searching for so long...
You seemed almost like home.
Draw my last breath - with you near.
*End Chorus*
I AM ONE
I am one who could never conform / to the societal norm / since I was born / I've worn / this W A A A R R R R
I've been broken / outspoken / and I've never stopped chokin' / on the "for why?" / we despise / your despicable kind / and you'll find / in the lines / of my deoxy-rhyming / that the height / we're both climbing / is with the side / we're deriding; / it's one and the same
so just... kill... your... pride and
hold me while I die!
I WASN'T ME ME Me me me...
I wasn't anyone else / it was hell / it was never knowing the water the water the water the water...
...In that stream.-.Line of genetic dictation / full recitation / of mother and father / mom and pops / I was born to be / everything / that wasn't me!
i am not! What I was born to be
i am not! What they should think of me
I want to be one last place that I have never seen-
((scream)) so let me die in the arms of someone who loves me!
*Chorus*
I'M NOT one of them / I've been runnin' from them / while you've been gunnin' them
DOWN I've been shunned / and stunned / and run / into the
GROUND So logically / I'm the enemy / of your enemy / even if our ancestry / shouts equality / so hold me, please just hold me!
I'm not repremanding / this blood on your hands / it's not allegorical / or metaphorical / it's only physical / missable / completely permissable.
The on-ly line I have - to rhyme / is I apologize that your hands aren't dry.
((slower))Don't sigh... (don't sigh) for me Don't cry... (don't cry) for me
There's no.thing you have to feel . just let me die in your arms!!
*Chorus*
I wanted something they hated...
I wanted you - your kind - your mind...
Your LOVE!
Would you mind if I died here?
I've been searching for so long...
You seem almost like home.
Draw my last breath -
Well, it needs some editing, I think, but anyone who sees it, lemme know anything you think ought to be switched around, changed, whatever. I think there needs to be more emphasis towards whomever the speaker's talking to regarding how little (s)he really wants from that person, but I'm not really sure where to put it. Somewhere in there there's room for guitar and clarinet solos, or some such like that, and I might make the end more hopeful, but chances are it'll just end on a major chord and resolve the song that way. Also, if there's a place for other water references, I think that would be good. I'm very open to suggestions and all; I usually work on something for more than one day before putting it up like this. Wait, that's not true- I usually work on song lyrics for more than a day before anyone sees them. biggrin
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I can guess at what might have inspired it, but I doubt I'd be right.
In any case, suggestions, further comments, and further analyses will be provided at a later time...