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YOU CAN'T STOP THE TRAIN BABY!!!!


Sir_K_Kay
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Writing a small story for GCSE course work
this is how far i am


okiez rate it


Chapter one:


The night was dark, rain pounded the on the roads, everything was peaceful...Well... Almost...

One car was on the roads, speeding from the woods trying to make it into town. Inside the car was a man. He was young, only 19, brown hair, blue eyes, he was rather good looking, but now his face was dark. Blood leaked from his nose, he was covered in dirt, running and fell perhaps, or maybe something else...

Rain pounded the car, Chris wasn't bothered. His thoughts were elsewhere. What was it? How could this happen? These thoughts raced through Chris' mind every time he closed his eyes he saw him/her he couldn't decide. What was it he asked himself over and over? His mind seemed ready to burst. The road, he must keep his eyes on the road. He shook the thoughts from his head and held the steering wheel tighter, evrytime he even blinked he saw those eyes, like it was inside his own head, but no, the road.

He glanced over his shoulder and was releaved to see nothing was behind him. The needle on the meter was hitting over 90 mph, he didn't care, he wanted to get away, after all he had lost did it matter if he crashed? Was it even worth living...?
"PULL OVER", a voice sounded behind him. He turned and saw only a police car, the officer inside was using a megaphone mounted atop of his patrol car.

"I REPEAT, PULL OVER OR I WILL STOP YOU"
The man said again, Chris didnt stop. It had tricked him once, this was just another trick...
"THIS IS YOUR LAST WARNING SON!" The voice sounded serious, maybe it wasn't a trick. Should he stop or keep going? Before he could make his mind up there was a loud bang. It echoed inside his head at this moment the rear left side of the car dropped, the officer and shot out the tire. Chris lost control of the car and it swerved into a ditch, as it crashed Chris was pushed by the force and his head collided with the dashboard. His last thoughts were "Its over"...


Chapter two:

"Doctor, his eyes are twitching, is he waking up?" Came a deep voice from Chris's left, who was it ? where am i ? his eyes hurt to much to open them fully
"I think so, let me take a look" Came another voice, this time a female voice, he could hear footsteps as he walked, at that moment his eye was forced open, the light burned his pupils but his vision cleared, he saw a face, a women about 20, brown hair.
"W-where am i" Chris said and followed on with harsh cough.
"Don't talk, you must rest" said the woman as she came closer he could read her name tag, [Marna Lei]

"To hell with rest, i want some answers boy" Came the male voice, Chris started to recognize it, the officer, Where was he, he had to know
"P-Please where am i ?" He coughed again as he spoke
"Your in hospital son" Came the officers voice "you're lucky to be alive, i thought you was a goner when i pulled you from the car"
The car, the road, the thing it all came flooding back to him, he sat bolt upright making both the Marna and officer jump.

"I cant be here, its not safe" Chris said trying to move, but Marna was stronger than she looked, she forced him back onto the bed, but he kicked and shouted
"Press that button" Marna shouted to the officer over Chris's shouts and she nodded her head over to a red button, which he pushed and within seconds 2 men came through the door, and held him down.
"ITS NOT SAFE LET ME GO" Chris shouted
"Sedate him" one of the men said, and the other reached for a needle and small bottle.

"ITS NOT SAFE LET ME GO" Chris shouted again
"Your safe here" Marna said trying to calm him down as the man injected him, Chris laid still, he could feel the drugs coursing through him
"its not me im worried about" Chris said and he slowly fell unconscious.
"what did that mean" Came the officers voice.



Chapter three:


Several hours later Chris finally regained consciousness and woke up in a smaller room, he tried to sit up, but he couldn't he looked down only to see he was restrained, he knew it was his fault, he thought to himself "should i tell them, maybe they know what it is, maybe they can help" He thought this over in his head. He closed his eyes again, the image of the thing was getting clearer, he could remember the eyes, they where dark and hollow like tunnels, the smell when it was near, it smelt like sulfur, just thinking about this made him feel sick, its mouth slightly bigger than a humans, but teethe as sharp as diamonds, it was built, strong but it was also fast.

The image grew clearer in his head, it seemed like it was invading his thoughts, like it was in his mind, he shook these thoughts away they were insane... But what he had been through was also insane, he opened his eyes and took a look around the room, there was a large mirror on the wall obviously it was a 2-way mirror Chris had seen them in films all the time, Not far from the mirror was a small door, it seemed to be the only entrance or exit to the room he could not just sit here, he had made his mind up he would have to tell them.

"Hello, is any one there" Chris shouted out, a few seconds passed and Marna opened the door and walked into the room "I'm here" she said closing the door behind her.
she pulled out a seat and sat next to him, she proceeded to pull a pen from her pocket, and make a little note on the clip board.

Can you tell me why you tried to get away" She asked him in a sweet tone "You was screaming it wasn't safe, why?"

Chris looked her in the eyes "I" he paused "We was attacked"...


Chapter four:


"You was on your own, what do you mean "We"? Marna asked keeping her sweet voice, as she spoke she was making more and more notes, This was his last chance to back out but he knew he must tell them, He closed his eyes for a moment, immediately opening them, the thing was still there, he sighed and took a deep breath..

"Well this is how it happened"...

[24 hours earlier]


"This is taking to long"
Chris moaned, he was sat in the passenger seat, he looked to his left to Courtney who was driving, she didn't reply just tutted he understood why he had been saying the same thing over and over again, Courtney was 18 and cute, well he thought so she had nice blue eyes, brown hair to her shoulders and a pretty face, she was wearing demin jeans, with a white T-shirt.

"Why are you staring?" She asked Chris

"Im not" he replied quickly, turning to look at the road

"You was i saw you, anyway here we are" She said as she turned onto a small path, Chris looked out of the window, he could see a lovely bright green forest, tree's spread out for miles, he looked up into the tree's and could see small animals, squirrels, birds and others darting from tree to tree.

Chris reached under the seat and grabbed a small tennis ball and threw it into the rear of the car, it hit somethings with a thump and it was followed by OUCH

"What on earth was that for" someone from the back seat shouted, as he sat up and yawned, his long hair almost covered his face which he tried to tame but didn't succeed, he looked around.

"finally were here, you could have woken me nicer Chris" He said thumping Chris on the back.


Chapter five:

"Yeh, Yeh" Chris said as Courtney Pulled the car to a halt, in a small clearing, Chris got out of the car and took a look round, it was small, well covered and dry, there must have been a campfire nearby as he could smell sulfor strongy, there was a few logs perfect for sitting on, a small hole in the ground that would be ideal for a campfire, the perfect place he thought.

"Can i get some help here" Came the other males voice, Chris turned to see Courtney rushing over to help him unload the tents and other things.

"Oi Steve" Chris shouted over to the other man, steven looked up.
"What" Steven looked up, "wait if this is about your tent, i didnt mean to leave it at home".
"Yes you did, ahwell ill share with Court then" Chris joked.
"No your not" Courtney shouted from the other side of the clearing.
Steven started laghing at Chris'

Chris took another look around, he could still smell sulfur but it was getting closer, he thoguht nothing of it and decided to get some firewood after telling the others he set off into the woods looking for dry wood, the further he walked the stronger the smell got, he heard a rustling behind him, quickly turning he saw a figure fall to the floor, he edged closer to get a look... As he got closer he could make out the shape of a body...


Chapter six:

What was it, Chris edged closer to the body, he made out a head of light blond hair he edged closer, she was wearing a white lab coat, blood splattered over the front he couldn't tell if it was her blood, he took another look at the face, there was a cracked pair of glasses, set askew on her face, blood leaked from the back of her head, the blood on the lab coat must have been her own, Chris bent down next to the body he had only just noticed the smell of sulfur growing again, he heard a snap of twigs not far behind him, he was crouched next to the body, to scared to move.

the smell grew stronger, something was behind him, he thought it was over so he turned around but nothing was there a sigh of relief left him as he turned back to the body...

the body was gone, it was right there 2 seconds ago, he must have imagined it, he was being stupid, a female scientist dead in the woods, he must have watched to many horrors, he stood up slowly swearing at him self, he thought better not
mention this, he took a step forward and stood on something, as he picked it up he realized what it was, he had in his hand a pair of cracked glasses...





User Comments: [18]
iblueRAiiNBOW
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comment Commented on: Thu Jan 31, 2008 @ 08:39pm
Wow. Its good. I can't wait to read chapter 2. I wonder if Chris lives or dies....?


comment Commented on: Thu Jan 31, 2008 @ 09:02pm
It's interesting but it's to short. theres not enough detail. What did chris look like?



Bo Brawler
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Sir_K_Kay
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comment Commented on: Thu Jan 31, 2008 @ 09:07pm
@ Ty - im gonna go into more detail on the charecters later


comment Commented on: Thu Jan 31, 2008 @ 09:31pm
Chapter two had to much talking in it. But, it was still very good. Try adding more detail, less talking. All in all, I liked it. ^^



iblueRAiiNBOW
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Poetic_Indulgence
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comment Commented on: Thu Jan 31, 2008 @ 10:42pm
Great beginning! Can't wait till you wright another chapter! blaugh biggrin


comment Commented on: Thu Jan 31, 2008 @ 11:11pm
omg i love it! >.< hehe good job man *pats shoulder*



sakura_taz_18
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HinataGYH
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comment Commented on: Thu Jan 31, 2008 @ 11:53pm
The girls name should be jenny >.> LOL Jenny Aaron Or Jenny Schubert LOL


comment Commented on: Fri Feb 01, 2008 @ 12:46am
*claps*>_> Am i alone here?

Thats coooool.

I think i'm the only one that dosent write
and make cool stories and stuffzs.
OMG I AM ALONE!



I_Talk_to_the_dead
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Bo Brawler
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comment Commented on: Fri Feb 01, 2008 @ 02:14am
Al right nicely done, A couple of spelling mistakes but it's all good


comment Commented on: Fri Feb 01, 2008 @ 03:59pm
this waz awsome i give it an easy 10



my shadowz sexi
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Nightbunny
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comment Commented on: Fri Feb 01, 2008 @ 06:13pm
wow it's really good ^-^ i want more!


comment Commented on: Fri Feb 01, 2008 @ 06:40pm
Great again. ^^ There was more detail in chapter three. Awesome. Post chapter four soon?



iblueRAiiNBOW
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Miyakitty
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comment Commented on: Fri Feb 01, 2008 @ 07:27pm
thats good =]


comment Commented on: Fri Feb 01, 2008 @ 08:43pm
Thats so weird, I have brown hair that goes down to my shoulders and I'm getting blue colored contacts soon. Hahaha. Great again. ^^



iblueRAiiNBOW
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Bo Brawler
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comment Commented on: Fri Feb 01, 2008 @ 09:26pm
nice


comment Commented on: Sun Feb 03, 2008 @ 08:46pm
nice, don't rush it though



Bo Brawler
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iblueRAiiNBOW
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comment Commented on: Sun Feb 03, 2008 @ 11:18pm
Great again. ^^ Ooooo, who's the figure that fell on the floor?


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