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"Maroki...You look so beautiful...."The security guard said as the beautiful stepped down the stairs of the dark elf mansion. "Shall we go?"Maroki asked as he interlaced his fingers with The Fish. They soon arrived at the prom,surpising everyone there. Maroki giggled happily as he twirled onto the dance floor.The night soon passed quickly. "You're the most interesting person I've ever met and protected."The Fish said getting closer to Maroki's face. "And you're very secretive and lovingly."Maroki replied. The 11 p.m. bell rung upon the tower.The security dipped Maroki upon the last bell ring and kissed him passionately.

Posted by: Marokia Fri Apr 03, 2009 @ 07:55pm

Life is like a runway.
If you fall you have to get up or else the b***h behind you will run over your damned a**.

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SisterGrimm13
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Fri Jun 12, 2009 @ 04:13am

amazing!And So romantic! heart blaugh

KaInu Komaru
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Fri Jul 10, 2009 @ 02:22am

what iteam is he?

Tesh Hiashi
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Thu Jul 23, 2009 @ 07:40am

very nice. ^_^ Have you ever Rp'd before?

Orobolas
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Thu Jun 03, 2010 @ 03:54am

This scene is lacking in my opinion. You could have added more and it wouldn't have hurt to leave out a few things. Sometimes being over-descriptive can be bad. It does paint a nice picture, though.
Remember, this is constructive criticism from one writer to another, not a flame, so I expect you to take it with a level head and not snap at me like you often do.

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