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Story's of the Night
It is official-- I have seriously gone insane. I've lost everything, and now I stuck wanting the thrill of the kill. Not just a simple hunt the screams of pain.
"Is that hurting" A say as I slow start to cut open the man laying in front of me. Unable to answer from pain the of the heated digging into body. "You know I one had a family but then I couldn't help my self. I was loosing it and all I wanted to hear was there screams." She say as she jolts the knife down making the man's screams ring out through the abandon building. "That sounds like when my husband was being killed. How how beautiful was the sound and blood, I didn't want it to stop." She rambled on until the room fell silent. Looking down at the life less body under with his organs now through all over the room and blood staining the floors even more. "Well then good night lucky kill number 100."
~Rader~
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User Comments: [2]
blackattk
Community Member





Mon Sep 01, 2014 @ 05:35am


Very chilling!
Just remember what perspective you are speaking in.
It makes it easier to follow the story. For example, I started in first person, but then you started changing it to SHE which is third person. The reason why I gave it to you in first was because I wanted to know the thoughts of the person that was going insane. But other than that-- good job~!


Rader Shadowfang
Community Member





Mon Sep 01, 2014 @ 05:49am


You must really be enjoying my stories, and thank you for I advice when I'm just writing I tend to do that a lot but I try not to.
~Rader~


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